the hills

I wrote this poem for NaPoWriMo 2013. It wasn't getting much attention at my other blog. Recently, I did a revision on it, a major rehaul. I think the revised version is a much better, more compact piece. :)





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the hills




looking down from the hills
to the town below
the apartment blocks
like pixelated lanterns

we can only barely imagine
people sleeping,
reading the papers,
watching tv with a beer,

while we are here in our foxholes,
reeking of earth
the toads croaking
their displeasure

in the weeds, the mimosa, a lighter
flares, a cigarette glows
red in the next hole,
a click of a safety catch,

a muffled cough, an expletive,
under a moth-bitten
blanket of sky,
we hunker down

for the night, cradling weapons,
wishing for a beer
a warm bath and
thinking of home too.




written 17/04/2013
revised 29/07/2013

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Shared on Poetry Pantry #156 at Poets United.


If you want to read the original poem, it's here.

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© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2013